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Mark Starlin's avatar

I have to believe this story will eventually make sense. But I don't envy the remaining writers trying to untangle the enigmas, wrapped in mysteries, wrapped in lies, wrapped in madness, wrapped in contradictions, wrapped in the future and the past and a multiverse, wrapped in... 🤣

Go Joey!

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Alex S. Garcia's avatar

Making sense is overrated :D

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Mark Starlin's avatar

90% of politicians agree. 🤣

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Alex S. Garcia's avatar

LMAO. So true!

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Adrian P Conway's avatar

And you turned my life into a bad line in a first draft dime store novel. Ooo, that’s some tough meta-criticism right there! 😂

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Arjun Agarwal's avatar

It's great to see how much the story has changed from the first chapter. Joey was just a 'normal' private detective before the start of the story and now he is an inter-time adventurer negotiating on gun point with criminals wanted by inter dimension authorities. The power creep is crazy but the story is so damn good...

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Geoffrey Golden's avatar

You upped the ante, Nick. It's gonna be hard to top a bomb in his brain!

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Nick Mazmanian's avatar

I mean, it could be a lie. Crystal does it all the time. ;)

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Thomas Bubb's avatar

I FREAKING loved this chapter!

It was the perfect continuation of the story and I especially loved how Joey’s a full badass now which I take some credit for. 😜

Great great job!

Can’t wait for what comes next but my money’s on Joey coming out on top. 👍

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Jackie Dana's avatar

Yeah Joey’s not gonna be pushed around anymore. his brain might explode, but he’ll be in charge when it happens.

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Thomas Bubb's avatar

Damn straight

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Todd's avatar

There is so much packed in this chapter. The Bogart and Bacall style dialog is a real throw back. It's interesting that time jumping has multiple effects: losing track of personal time and time ripples (open doors) that cause various timelines to start overlapping!

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Nick Mazmanian's avatar

Thanks for reading!

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Anthony Lora's avatar

This showdown is everything. We can talk about how wild the bomb reveal is, but the dialogue is what blew me away. The "human zigzag" and "dummy gun" lines were excellent. And the way you wrote him closing the distance made it feel every bit like the turning point it should be. Bravo!

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Nick Mazmanian's avatar

Thank you! I felt at this point in the story he it was needed. Yeah, the lines were a blast to write, really enjoyed what came out of it.

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Winston Malone's avatar

“You listen to me you damn zigzag of a human being: Do it.”

After re-reading, this is my favorite line. Had me laughing out loud! Bravo.

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